I've got a couple more stories done today, the Phone Tag and
Backwards exercises are both done now, and both were very nice to write given
how much trouble I'm still having with 'The Reluctant I'. The backwards one I
have a few reservations about, but more on that later. For now, here's the
Phone Tag exercise. Just a couple of quick notes beforehand: pay attention to
the date at the start, it's important, and be prepared for quite a dark and
tragic piece.
Last Call (Phone Tag exercise)
Norfolk, England,
August 1940
Stanley waited patiently by the phone, just as he always
had, while Ella (he should really call her Miss Stapleton, but she never
minded) made the call. As she spun the dial and asked to be put through, he sat
in silence, sipping his hot chocolate and trying not to wince at the heat. He
was nearly seven, after all, and it wouldn’t do for him to be upset by it. Not
in front of Ella, anyway. She was a Grown Up, and never upset.
The call seemed to take longer than usual, and when the
phone finally seemed to connect, Ella did not immediately hand it over like she
usually did. Instead, she seemed to stiffen, and when she spoke, her voice that
Stanley had come to know meant safety and strength suddenly seemed to say ‘help
me’.
“’Hello? Hello?” she
began, and Stanley leant forward to try and hear. He knew he shouldn’t, and
that mother would think it awfully rude, but something wasn’t right. There was
no ‘Hello, Mrs Wallace, can I pass you to Stan?’ or even the bright and lilted
‘How are you, Mrs Wallace? Good, good, I’ll pass you over now.’ that he
sometimes heard if she was in a particularly good mood that day.
“Hello?” she said again, and then “Oh.” A long silence followed, in which Stanley
could do nothing but wait, perched on the edge of the step.
“No, no, he’s here. But I’ll hear it first, please.” Stanley
noticed that she was doing the cross voice that he only got when he was
naughty.
“Right…. Right… Oh crikey… Oh God.” Ella paused for a moment
more, swallowed, and seemed to calm herself.
‘Close your eyes and
count to ten.’ Stanley wanted to tell her, just like she taught him, but he
said nothing. It would be rude to interrupt, especially a Grown Up. Still, she
managed to regain composure as he knew she would, and started speaking again,
her voice even more ragged now than before, a tapestry fraying at the edges.
“Ok… Ok, I’ll tell… Oh God no. How did it…?”
Stanley began chewing his lip and tapping his fingers in
patterns of four beats on the bannister, counting each and trying to
understand. Why wasn’t he allowed to speak to Mother? Or even Father? At the
very least he would like to have said goodnight to them. Confused, he went back
to listening to the call, fighting to understand. Like in the stories, Sherlock
Holmes solving a mystery. Those stories always had a happy ending, didn’t they?
Especially when Ella told them.
“Right. Right. Both of them?” Another age-long pause. “Ok. So what will you do about… what will you
do about him?”
Stanley noticed the pointed look his way that Ella must have
thought he hadn’t. His mind was flying now, running through idea after idea.
Maybe they were coming to visit, and they were already on the way? Maybe they
had gone on holiday away from the city? But why hadn’t they told him?
“Right. Of course I will. Of course I will.” Ella put the
phone down and stepped back as if it were a live snake, or a dead rat, or a
monster from under the bed she always promised weren’t there. “I’ll tell him.”
She said hysterically, voice high like it went when she was singing, but not as
happy. That voice made the world better, this one seemed to tear it apart.
“I’ll tell him… I’ll tell him.” She stared into the distance at something
Stanley couldn’t see, but because he tried anyway, he didn’t see the tears flooding
her eyes.
After Time (he didn’t quite know how much), he finally spoke
up.
“Can I speak to Mother and Father now, please? Are they
going to phone back?”
Ella appeared to evaporate before his eyes. She still stood
there, not moving, but all the life and soul had left her like a sparrow flying
south to warmer climes. She looked down at him, but not into his eyes, and
finally, finally told him.
“They aren’t going to call back…” She sobbed, sinking to her
knees and clutching desperately at Stanley. “Oh God, Stanley, they’re never
going to call back.”
***
Author's notes:
- First off, a note on the tone of this piece. It really is
upsetting and tragic, but again I hope I've handled it well. This is probably
one of the saddest and most unpleasant pieces I've written, but at the same
time, I think it is in a way quite touching and relevant. The story touches on
a lot of themes that I do like, such as the innocence of childhood, the bond
between parents and children and the way this is affected by various
circumstances.
- This piece is also unusual for me in that the setting is
not only a new area in terms of my writing, but also massively informing of the
piece, without being explicitly explained. The first person that read this
missed the date at the start, and the piece took on an entirely different
meaning. So that's something I've not really done before, and I'm interested to
hear whether it works or whether the story as a whole is too vague.
- I hope that the perspective on the story works well
enough. I think I've managed to capture the mind of a 1940s child well enough,
but I'm of course open to criticism.
I'll post the next one later today, and for now, any
comments are welcome as per usual.
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